I am a moonpie! (savingdaisydiva) wrote in metaquotes,
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hollaback_rich is stuck on potatoes

Your smut scene was...decent, not brilliant, but not eye-gouging-out-bad, until I hit the line 'her twin heaping white mountains quivered with pleasure'.

I pictured a woman with two stacks of oddly passionate mashed potatoes on her chest shaking at the bad metaphor.


Context is hungry for mashed potatoes, QWP.
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